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    摘要:分享成功獲得伯明翰大學offer的三份個人陳述,分別是哲學、歷史學、環境與可持續發展三個專業,講故事、談書籍、用比喻,五星的范文都有這些寫作亮點。

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    3篇個人陳述范文分享 成功斬獲伯明翰offer圖1

    范文一:

    專業:哲學

    Offer:伯明翰大學 倫敦大學國王學院 約克大學 諾丁漢大學

    評分:五星

    “The first and simplest emotion which we discover in the human mind is curiosity”. I believe that when the mind is allowed to think outside the pre-defined constraints of society, the different directions in which it can travel are infinite.

    Philosophy for me is the basis on which our lives are based and after reading Aristotle’s Ethics, it is fascinating to find that a lot of the beliefs I hold are so similar to those held by someone who lived over two thousand years ago. My main inspiration for taking Philosophy is Socrates and his unapologetic moral compass. Even when confronted with his own mortality, he refuses to take the easy option that would compromise what he believes in, for me Socrates incorporates everything I feel a good person should be. I am most interested in learning about Ancient Greek philosophy because I feel that in this day and age, the majority of people have lost sight of the basic principles of morals and ethics written by the likes of Plato and Aristotle all those years ago. I also believe like Descartes that I must forget everything I think I know about life and start from the beginning and the next step for me is university.

    I have particularly enjoyed studying Dr Carol Dweck’s theories of Intelligence. I related to this study because I feel that it summed up my years at school almost perfectly. For most of my childhood up until the end of my teenage years my view on intelligence was, as Dr Dweck theorizes, the “Entity theory of intelligence”. Threatened by failure I have shied away from academic study, because I felt that failure indicated a lack of intelligence and because of this view I never committed myself to my studies. My views on this have radically changed over the last 7 years and I now believe that intelligence is interchangeable, that if curiosity is ignited in the right way, it can be enhanced with the only limitation being yourself.

    I am currently a student of Psychology and Politics which I am really enjoying. It is exciting to be back in a learning environment and I feel that even though I have done a lot of reading at home, nothing compares to being able to debate a point and question reasoning face to face. I have always been an enthusiastic reader but my thirst for knowledge and understanding didn’t really explode until I was 18. The advancement in available material through the internet has helped me in my quest to learn and understand anything and everything. I have read a huge amount of material on many varying subjects from the philosophy of war and pacifism to the psychology behind serial killers and the study of love.

    My questions are questions not only about the world around me but questions about myself as a human being, is my moral compass true and just? Or does an era a person lives in determine what they perceive to be right and wrong and why? For me this is a journey of self-discovery, analysing myself, what I am and how I have come to be the way I am is just as important to me as understanding the world around me.

    I believe that stimulating the body is just as important as stimulating the mind so next year I will be taking part in the Virgin London Marathon on behalf of the World Wide Fund for Nature. I am also fairly well travelled and lived in Australia for 2 years, I also did charity work in Bolivia and have visited Peru, Thailand and Laos amongst others. Leonardo Da Vinci was once asked what the key to his genius was; his reply was simple “Sapere Vedere” which translates as ‘Knowing how to see’. For me understanding the mind and combining this with the basic principles of what it is to be aware, to be human, our interactions and what we think to be right and wrong is so important.

    點評:

    1. 首句為引用,引用需謹慎,要能幫助說明問題;

    2. 談《亞里士多德倫理學》、古希臘哲學對自己的影響,與哲學產生聯系,具體且具說服力

    3. 核心詞“curiosity”,全文都圍繞這一主題詞展開;

    4. 談學習內容,顯示對哲學的熱愛和較全面的學識素養;

    5. 最后一段話談身體與大腦的關系,自然引到課外活動和興趣愛好上來。

    6. 建議多談實例,少概括和總結。

    范文二:

    專業:歷史學

    Offer:英國倫敦大學學院 卡迪夫大學 伯明翰大學

    評分:五星

    My decision to study History was never a difficult one. Having always been captivated by the past and its relationship to the present, study at Advanced Level has served only to strengthen my interest. Last year I especially enjoyed reading Gash's biography of Robert Peel. In comparing his approach to history with that of other historians, I found myself profoundly interested in Gash's conviction that Peel was an individual who shaped not only his time, but the rest of the century. Seeking to read more widely than the syllabus allowed, Christopher Hill's 'God's Englishman' provided me with a historical perspective which, although very different, appealed to me perhaps as much as Gash's. Indeed, the comparison between interpretations is one of the most exciting parts of the study of history; but far from being persuaded by a single perspective, I strive to understand and appreciate the differences. Also of particular appeal to me was reading Hague's biography of Pitt the Younger. Although not a professional historian, Hague's expertise in today's politics and the politics of previous centuries helped me to bridge the gap between the two. The world of ideas also fascinates me, which began with my reading about Marxism after studying Russian history. With the help of my school's "Intellectual Development Extending Able Students" program I expanded my interest in philosophy, which was most helpful in comparing Gash and Hill's respective views of history. Through the program I took specific interest in Nietzsche, whose appeal to me is owed partly to the emphasis he places upon interpretation, and partly to the satisfaction I found in finishing "Beyond Good and Evil" with more questions posed than answered!

    Similarly my Advanced Level studies have also helped stimulate my historical interest. Law has brought me closer to politics and current affairs, and there were times when studying factory legislation of the nineteenth century obscured the divisions between History and Law. Post-graduation, I aspire to train as a legal professional, and hope to take with me a better understanding of legal history. Moreover, my interest in Geography has always leant toward the socio-political/ economic aspects of the subject, which are closely linked to the study of history. Learning German and spending time in Germany has brought not just a life skill, but also a better understanding of German culture. Much more than a life enhancing and simple pleasure, it became of great use in my study of nineteenth century German history and in appreciating Marx, Nietzsche and even Luther to a greater extent. Although this historical awareness may be considered narrow, one of my main motivations for studying history at degree level is to broaden my horizons. This will certainly include extending my, already well cemented, love of the discipline.

    Believing the old adage about a healthy mind in a healthy body, I have long been a member of a lifesaving club. This has allowed me to qualify as a pool lifeguard thus improving my medical awareness and sense of responsibility. Above all, the role has helped my confidence to respond in an emergency which, as a practical person, I would wish always to be able to do. I strive to complete all tasks to a high standard and with great enthusiasm and have developed a fierce determination to achieve. Additionally, regularly competing as a lead speaker in my School's Debating Society is not only greatly enjoyable, but has also helped to stimulate my competitive nature. In order to unwind, I often write creatively; which is frequently not just a matter of pen and paper, but one which involves guitar and piano (both of which I have some fluency in). If successful in my application I will capitalise on the opportunity to learn from leading practitioners in their fields. Furthermore, I will offer the utmost of my abilities in both the curricular and extra-curricular aspects of university life.

    點評:

    1. 申請者以“閱讀”為主題,談了《羅伯特皮爾傳》等多本書籍,且都有自身思考,同時展示了自己的哲學素養;

    2. 第一段內容過多,應該有自然分段,關于在學校的活動項目可以組織成新的一段;

    3. 介紹多種與歷史相關學科的學習,比如法律、地理,展示了申請者學習熱情和潛能;

    4. 最后提到興趣愛好,有具體的例子,展示了多種素質。

    范文三:

    專業:環境和可持續發展

    Offer:東英吉利亞大學 蘭卡斯特大學 伯明翰大學 圣安德魯斯大學

    星級:五星

    Mankind is rocketing towards an unrecognisable existence. Bird song resonates with explosive drilling; monoculture has usurped diversity; indigenous knowledge is drowning in concrete. These are the ever increasing signs that human responsibility has leapt from the wheel, and left destruction on cruise control.

    The dynamic relationship between humans and the Earth has always captivated me. I can recall the first time I heard the words ‘climate change,’ ‘consumerism,’ and ‘overpopulation’; more importantly, I remember the lump in my throat and the worry that lined my face like an Ordnance Survey map. I chose A level Environmental Studies to give substance to the issues that are continually significant to me. Discovering the pollution pandemic, alternative energy, protocols of Montreal, Kyoto and more has fuelled me with a drive to make sustainable living not only more accessible, but globally more accepted. Further study of a related degree is the only way forward for me. A desire to complement the broad spectrum of Environmental Studies naturally led me to the fascinating intricacy of Biology. Here my scientific skills have been honed by controlled experiments, leading to statistical analysis and debating ethical issues. Holistically, English Literature was an obvious choice; the need for imaginative communicators is vital to catalyse understanding and unity. Extensive essay writing combined with an exploration of views and purpose has shaped me into an open minded, creative, and engaging writer.

    After A levels, I am deferring my university entry due to a placement I have secured in Ecuador. For three months, I will join a small, voluntary team in the Andean rainforest. This is a grass roots project; the core of the work involving restructuring the community’s income from timber logging to eco tourism and organic farming, whilst providing environmental education in a local school. This experience will give me a unique opportunity to apply my studies to a real life situation and, vitally, help sew the seed of environmental conservation to the tourists and indigenous community. I have raised my project fund through part time jobs in a local café and bar. Balancing this with my other endeavours such as The Duke of Edinburgh Award, cooking, and salsa dancing has been challenging, but I have maintained my dedication to all with zeal. The determination it has taken to plan this trip has ignited a work ethic that will help me throughout the challenges of university.

    For the future, my vision is to use my degree to communicate the urgency to act upon what we are continually learning about the Earth, before the ramifications of our actions become catastrophic. I understand that cultures have a right to develop to gain equal standards of sanitation and economic stability; volunteering in the Salvation Army soup kitchens has shown me people who are desperately suffering. Yet it is imperative global standards of living are progressed in a way that promotes harmony throughout the environmental and social realms, without compromising future needs. Retreating glaciers, drought, foreign disease: far too many tragedies prove we have a debt to pay to our incredible planet, a duty to evolve society around sustainable ways of life. The thought of studying issues of such overwhelming importance fills me with awe. I cannot wait to be in a community where my enthusiasm is shared by experts who have the knowledge, resources and experience to help me flourish.

    It was during an English lesson that I stumbled upon this unforgettable omen: “The sedge is wither’d from the lake, and no birds sing.” These poignant words, by the poet Keats, were even credited in Rachel Carson’s revolutionary ‘Silent Spring’. However, I’m glad to say: Mr. Keats, I disagree. Humanity has not yet rendered your prophecy true. Through university, I hope to take my first steps to help steer the world from the clutches of devastation, before it is too late.

    點評:

    1. 第一段用了形象的比喻,闡述申請者對環境的深刻認識,同時顯示不錯的英文功底;

    2. 申請者在全文中用了不少比喻,使文章生動且與眾不同;

    3. 申請者談了關于生物、科學實驗技能、英國文學的學習,展示了多樣的知識架構;

    4. 講了自己參加與環境相關的志愿實踐推遲入學的小故事,選擇非常好;

    5. 為了平衡內容,談了獎學金、烹飪和跳舞,然而這一段描述過于刻意,“ Balancing this with my other endeavours such as……”不應該在文中明確表示出來。

    6. 最后,首尾呼應,展示了一種積極樂觀和自信的面貌。

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